tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8939951804632494408.post3575901488223884855..comments2023-08-06T04:09:05.980-05:00Comments on Cornell DeVille : LAVENDERUnknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8939951804632494408.post-38926878508915771412010-01-27T17:21:27.357-06:002010-01-27T17:21:27.357-06:00I love the idea for this book. Your paragraph desc...I love the idea for this book. Your paragraph describing the book, however, might go too in depth. Because the book is only 350 words, I almost get the feeling that I know the entire book. Why would I need to read it? We don't want that for your query, so I would suggest cutting everything after the sentence describing his misadventures and long nose. :)<br /><br />The first paragraph could go into that last paragraph to finish off the letter nicely. overall, this sounds like an awesome children's book. Good luck and hope this helps.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8939951804632494408.post-40969715277994839812010-01-27T14:38:34.541-06:002010-01-27T14:38:34.541-06:00This is lovely, I would definitely buy this for my...This is lovely, I would definitely buy this for my little girl (I can just see that purple elephant). I do hope it sees its way into publication.Marice Kraalhttp://maricekraal.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8939951804632494408.post-55572973629914723602010-01-27T11:39:00.510-06:002010-01-27T11:39:00.510-06:00It's cute, just make sure that Lavender doesn&...It's cute, just make sure that Lavender doesn't come of sounding so much like a huffalump.Josin L. McQueinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05751043333147850336noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8939951804632494408.post-62061849844076767802010-01-27T09:19:46.602-06:002010-01-27T09:19:46.602-06:00I agree with Trish. I'm not good with queries...I agree with Trish. I'm not good with queries for picture books, but this sounds awesome. I wish you the best of luck with it. Also, I know that you'll switch the "Agent of my dreams" to a real agents name when the time comes, so I wouldn't worry about it for now. :)J.A. Soudershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17460557430817566294noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8939951804632494408.post-36888380874489605872010-01-27T09:17:29.061-06:002010-01-27T09:17:29.061-06:00I'm not great with queries for picture books, ...I'm not great with queries for picture books, but I really love your query. The story sounds delightful and you've made it come alive.<br /><br />The only problem I think maybe the first line. I'm not sure if agents will like being called the agent of your dreams. It sounds a little bit too much to me. I could be wrong though. That's just my opinion.<br /><br />Good luck with it.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03216407428320615449noreply@blogger.com