tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8939951804632494408.post8907198697857811157..comments2023-08-06T04:09:05.980-05:00Comments on Cornell DeVille : ENTRY 11Unknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8939951804632494408.post-75240561229367445972010-02-03T09:37:56.428-06:002010-02-03T09:37:56.428-06:00Very interesting concept you've got here. I li...Very interesting concept you've got here. I like how you bring a natural event into someone's lfe that is actually PART of their life. What a great angle! Yes, this would make a great query, with a little (very little) work to polish it up a bit more.<br /><br />Godd luck with this, I think you may have a winner here!Martihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01055324404000150769noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8939951804632494408.post-22066771060749521712010-02-01T09:48:11.525-06:002010-02-01T09:48:11.525-06:00With a little tweaking, this would be a great quer...With a little tweaking, this would be a great query. I love the idea of someone turning into a storm. It sure is different and a good hook.<br /><br />Good luck.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03216407428320615449noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8939951804632494408.post-39953944770582047682010-01-31T21:26:48.763-06:002010-01-31T21:26:48.763-06:00This is an interesting story idea. A lot of the di...This is an interesting story idea. A lot of the different aspects intrigue. I'd like to know more about the voice of the main character in the novel, but I'd definitely read it. Good luck!Mimhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08685941102691667990noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8939951804632494408.post-23288474596839659342010-01-31T15:57:37.491-06:002010-01-31T15:57:37.491-06:00The story is intriguing and fresh, but I feel this...The story is intriguing and fresh, but I feel this query may be a bit more of a synopsis. I just know you can get more voice and punch into it!<br />Perhaps join the middle two paragraphs and don't mention the dad. I like the first and the last paragraph, but feel the middle is very wordy.<br />Best of luckGemhttp://www.gemmacooper.co.uknoreply@blogger.com