tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8939951804632494408.post2990220842684547561..comments2023-08-06T04:09:05.980-05:00Comments on Cornell DeVille : Entry 40Unknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8939951804632494408.post-35999795751409316072010-04-19T22:58:04.117-05:002010-04-19T22:58:04.117-05:00I agree with everything said up above and just wan...I agree with everything said up above and just wanted to say that this story sounds awesome and I'd want to read it. I don't know if I've ever seen the twist of killing an angel by killing it's soul mate.J.S. Woodhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09231458559331295121noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8939951804632494408.post-2623340931535224902010-04-13T20:24:31.933-05:002010-04-13T20:24:31.933-05:00This is a strong query and flows nicely, but you m...This is a strong query and flows nicely, but you might want to clarify that Leo is in fact an angel, if that's what he is. It took me a couple of reads to figure that out, but I might be slow! ;-)<br /><br />Also, there's currently a lot of angel books on the market, how is yours different?Melissahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11886151771194369513noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8939951804632494408.post-30752715242590101372010-04-13T16:15:48.720-05:002010-04-13T16:15:48.720-05:00This type of story is one that a really enjoy. I t...This type of story is one that a really enjoy. I think sticking to one point of view in the query will make the query stronger. I would stick to the point of view that opens up your book, because that way agents will know what to expect.<br /><br />Good luck!Mimhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08685941102691667990noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8939951804632494408.post-29659441308665627782010-04-13T08:05:11.754-05:002010-04-13T08:05:11.754-05:00This sounds like a very interesting story, and I l...This sounds like a very interesting story, and I love the way you've described the southern belles and southern hospitality. You must be familiar with both.<br /><br />I can only surmise from the way the query is written that this is told in both the POV of Grace and Leo. But Leo gets more attention in the query than Grace, so I wonder if you should start with him. Don't know - just an opinion based on what I read here.<br /><br />Good luck.Cordelia Dinsmorehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10704456269484202163noreply@blogger.com