tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8939951804632494408.post4966875306967122763..comments2023-08-06T04:09:05.980-05:00Comments on Cornell DeVille : Entry 26Unknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8939951804632494408.post-74467156505352077022010-05-07T17:42:11.445-05:002010-05-07T17:42:11.445-05:00How far into the future does this story take place...How far into the future does this story take place? I'd like to get a rough sense, but you don't have to get specific and give an exact year. <br /><br />Before the end of paragraph 2, I wasn't aware that Stone was keeping any secrets, so this is confusing.<br /><br />You have room to expand here -- can you give a few details about New America, to set the scene?<br /><br />This is fascinating. Nice work.Jamie Weiss Chiltonnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8939951804632494408.post-14639388037615338482010-04-13T17:39:13.026-05:002010-04-13T17:39:13.026-05:00This is a stand-out premise. Very futuristic and ...This is a stand-out premise. Very futuristic and full of great conflict.<br /><br />I'm not sure how much voice is in this query, since I haven't seen your manuscript, of course, but I feel like it could be even a little more peppy.<br /><br />Still, I think you'll get requests just for originality of the premise and I'm green with envy over that!<br /><br />Good luck!Liz Czukashttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15656897969180818333noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8939951804632494408.post-28213484729619546142010-04-13T15:30:43.266-05:002010-04-13T15:30:43.266-05:00This sounds so interesting!
The only part I won...This sounds so interesting! <br /><br />The only part I wondered about was who was the blessing or curse - the dictator or the bodyguard. Since the dictator freaks me out - I'm going with Stone. (I'm hoping blessing!)<br /><br />I'd grab this off the shelf!Heather Doughertyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06753809418516249464noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8939951804632494408.post-67960678321655184172010-04-13T09:10:34.523-05:002010-04-13T09:10:34.523-05:00I think the premise is awesme, very original. The ...I think the premise is awesme, very original. The dictator sounds creepy!! LOL I'd totally read this one. :)Annie McElfreshhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14312634754232333138noreply@blogger.com