Wednesday, January 27, 2010

LAVENDER

Dear Agent of My Dreams:

I am seeking representation for my 350-word Picture Book, Lavender, which is included. Lavender is proof that best friends see past their differences.

When an energetic elephant arrives in a child’s bedroom in search of a playmate, chaos rules the day. LAVENDER’S intentions are good; he just wants to play. But he has a long nose for trouble, and it leads from one misadventure to the next. When he uproots the flower garden and turns it into a quagmire, the mud starts flying. Mommy gathers up the offenders and herds them inside for a bath. After a thorough scrubbing, it’s time for a nap. And if you think a purple elephant isn’t cuddly, then you must meet Lavender.

Thank you for your consideration. I look forward to hearing from you.

5 comments:

  1. I'm not great with queries for picture books, but I really love your query. The story sounds delightful and you've made it come alive.

    The only problem I think maybe the first line. I'm not sure if agents will like being called the agent of your dreams. It sounds a little bit too much to me. I could be wrong though. That's just my opinion.

    Good luck with it.

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  2. I agree with Trish. I'm not good with queries for picture books, but this sounds awesome. I wish you the best of luck with it. Also, I know that you'll switch the "Agent of my dreams" to a real agents name when the time comes, so I wouldn't worry about it for now. :)

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  3. It's cute, just make sure that Lavender doesn't come of sounding so much like a huffalump.

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  4. This is lovely, I would definitely buy this for my little girl (I can just see that purple elephant). I do hope it sees its way into publication.

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  5. I love the idea for this book. Your paragraph describing the book, however, might go too in depth. Because the book is only 350 words, I almost get the feeling that I know the entire book. Why would I need to read it? We don't want that for your query, so I would suggest cutting everything after the sentence describing his misadventures and long nose. :)

    The first paragraph could go into that last paragraph to finish off the letter nicely. overall, this sounds like an awesome children's book. Good luck and hope this helps.

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