Monday, April 12, 2010

Entry 26

Title: LARCH
Genre: YA

Seventeen-year-old Larch has her uncle, the dictator of New America, wrapped around her finger. She can have anything she desires -- except for her freedom, the one thing she wants most. To make matters even worse, after two kidnapping attempts she's assigned a mysterious new bodyguard named Stone.

Larch can’t decide if he’s a blessing or a curse. He makes her feel alive, special...and even LESS free than before. He's stuck to her like glue -- until her house catches fire, and she's separated from him...and realizes he's not the only one with secrets.

Larch is a clone of her uncle, the dictator's, dead wife, the only successful clone in the world, and her creator -- none other than Stone's father -- wants her back.

Larch must escape the dictator's marriage bed, her creator's lab, and her own doubts about Stone if she is to survive, and finally gain the freedom she has craved her entire life.

LARCH is complete at 60,000 words. Thank you for your time and consideration.


  1. I think the premise is awesme, very original. The dictator sounds creepy!! LOL I'd totally read this one. :)

  2. This sounds so interesting!

    The only part I wondered about was who was the blessing or curse - the dictator or the bodyguard. Since the dictator freaks me out - I'm going with Stone. (I'm hoping blessing!)

    I'd grab this off the shelf!

  3. This is a stand-out premise. Very futuristic and full of great conflict.

    I'm not sure how much voice is in this query, since I haven't seen your manuscript, of course, but I feel like it could be even a little more peppy.

    Still, I think you'll get requests just for originality of the premise and I'm green with envy over that!

    Good luck!

  4. Jamie Weiss ChiltonMay 7, 2010 at 5:42 PM

    How far into the future does this story take place? I'd like to get a rough sense, but you don't have to get specific and give an exact year.

    Before the end of paragraph 2, I wasn't aware that Stone was keeping any secrets, so this is confusing.

    You have room to expand here -- can you give a few details about New America, to set the scene?

    This is fascinating. Nice work.


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