Title: Room Seven
Genre: Dark/Spiritual
I've been here before. I know the routine. But this time around, it feels difficult. The hall leading to the room feels like an abyss...longer, deeper, darker. And with every step, I ache. It feel like the air is being sucked right out of me. Hmph....A deflated baloon is what I'll be. But I need to finish this. Tonight.
I would continue reading this. Just enough clues established around what is happening. Well done in first person.
ReplyDeleteThis is good and has a great hook. I would read on to see what happened.
ReplyDeleteI would keep reading. You have piqued my interest although I would like something concrete soon. We have no real sense of location or narrator which gets annoying if dragged on too long. But your last sentences, and their urgency, makes me want to keep going.
ReplyDeleteI was with you until the deflated balloon line. It sort of takes the creepiness out of it for me. Gripping overall. Intriguing title.
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