I love the intrigue implied by this opening!
This one has been bothering the crap out of me for two days now because I KNOW I've read it somewhere. I just can't remember where. LOL If I remember right, though, somebody was talking about good first lines. So there you have it. Good job. Nice start, but...not enough to keep me reading (quantity, not quality). Would have liked to have seen what comes in the next few lines to know for sure that I'm hooked.
Giving this one the vote in the round of ten left. Probably won't work too well, though - none of my top choices made the finals.
I love character based stories and this MC sounds like a very interesting character indeed.
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