Aspen bears a unique burden. Apparently, she's the only one who can see the chaos that demons are reaping. Lying her way out of a mental institution, Aspen sets out to find her estranged sister, Cedar. While searching the slums of the city, she stumbles upon Devlin, a man who not only sees demons, but holds the power to destroy them.
Devlin's father was a demon who raped his mother and left her for dead. As a half-breed, Devlin has the ability to see and even interact with the demons around him. His conflict between his destructive demonic tendencies and his human compassion tear at him daily, but long ago he resolved to fight for life and humanity.
As Devlin joins with Aspen to find Cedar they notice a rising trend in demonic activities which leads them to the Mayan 2012 doomsday prophecies. With the help of Devlin's genius uncle, and by following hidden prophetic clues, they find themselves deep in a treacherous jungle in South America, standing before the fabled Tree of Life. There they learn that the demons need someone with a physical body to pluck the fruit of the Tree for them in order for the demons to obtain what they desire most of all: bodies of flesh and blood to further exploit their evil powers.
See All Evil is a paranormal romance that takes place during the increasingly popular 2012 doomsday speculations. I'm a member of the League of Utah Writers, and placed first in the 2009 Oquirrh Writer's contest.
Sample chapters and a full manuscript are available upon request. Thank you in advance for your time and consideration.
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I like the storyline of this book. It gives me a sense of foreboading. :) The one thing I would recommend is to shorten your description. From what I've read (mainly agent Nathan Bransford's blog), agents prefer short and simple. The description is good, but maybe a little much. Your first paragraph is awesome as a hook (I love the girls' names), but for the other two, you might want to summarize your summary. Give the GASP! thing Michael was talking about.
ReplyDeleteoverall, I would read this book. :) You just want to be careful that your query doesn't give away your book. You want to hook them and leave them wanting to know more, you know? :) Hope this helps. Good luck!
This is a fantastic query, but like the other person said, you may be giving away too much, mainly in the last paragraph.
ReplyDeleteYou also forgot to add the genre and word count.
Otherwise it's wonderful and has a great hook. Good luck with it.