Animals may bite but people always suck. It’s the motto thirty-two year old Drue has lived by all his life. He longs for the snow to melt so he can disappear into the wild with nary a nitwit to be seen—to escape the confines of a narrow-minded and cloying society. Yet, when he discovers an old friend has published the book he helped create, a new plan surfaces. Revenge.
Bestselling author Dakota Whitmore is in a slump. Sure, her husband is dead and she's adopted his long-time mistress's child, but she's endured more difficult things. Maybe what she needs is a little help, a beta reader who will tell her that her work hasn't turned into a steaming cow pie. How about uber sexy Drue, the man who helped her pen her first—and only, bestseller? Nothing could possibly go wrong. Right?
A completed manuscript at 79,000 words, Redeeming Characters is a story about self-doubt and second chances. Selected as an Editor’s Choice in September 2009 at textnovel.com and a semi-finalist in Dorchester’s Next Best Celler contest, it is a humorous and heartwarming portrayal of a bestselling author who has lost her mojo and the man that got away.
I read on the website that you represent contemporary romance. My list of publish works include Worth the Wait, a short contemporary romance presented by Freya’s Bower, my mystery/chick lit novel The Misadventures of the Laundry Hag: Skeletons in the Closet and the upcoming contemporary romance River Rats, both available through Wild Child Publishing.
Thank you for your time and I look forward to hearing from you.
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This is pretty amazing, in MHO. Concise and well-written, with no extraneous meanderings to distract us.
ReplyDeleteThe only thing that made me stop was the order of the first two paragraphs. I think if we knew first that she is looking at the possibility of using Drue, without knowing he feels betrayed by her, that it might read more smoothly.
Overall, though, nicely done.
Thank you! Another writer friend suggested that as well, as the revenge theme was stronger at the end, so I'm outnumbered!
ReplyDeleteThis is a really good query letter. The only things that caught my eye were the last sentence of paragraph three (the grammar or tense or whatever nouns are don't quite match) and your credentials. Would it help to put the year they were published? I know some agents like that so they can refer back to it. :) Overall, very nice!
ReplyDelete...I kinda wanna read it...maybe a lot. :D
Oh, sigh, if only I could write my query as well as this one. It's great and I would love to read this story.
ReplyDeleteGood luck