Friday, January 22, 2010

ENTRY 48

Title: Them Chickens
Genre: Adult

We opened the henhouse door and them chickens just flew!!!!

6 comments:

  1. I want to know what is happening just because of the sentence. It kinds of got my attention when you said "them chickens just flew!!!!"

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  2. I like this one. I love the last sentence too.

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  3. I would buy this book from this one, simply irresistable sentence.

    Great hook.

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  4. I like this. I've got setting and voice and action. Very nice! And in one sentence. Lovely.

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  5. "Brevity is the soul of wit," and you've pulled that off. I wanted more, but that's a good thing. Sounds like a fun read.

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  6. Might be a bit nitpicky, but you don't need more than one exclamation point.

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